One hot sunny day lots of people went to the beach because it was so hot. While they were at the beach they had everything they had. Everyone like to go to the beach because they love swimming in the water. This little girls name was Emma and she went to the beach with her family. She had lots of fun.
Next she went swimming with her dad, her dad said “Emma don’t go too far” and Emma said “ok dad”. Emma was having fun playing in the water with her dad and she asked if she could play with the ball on her own.After that she was trying to reach the ground and she couldn’t.
While she was trying to reach the ground she was still floating on the ball and then she pushed it away so when she did try reaching for the ground and she didn’t. Meanwhile she started drowning and her Dad saw her and raced over to help get her up. He pulled her to shore and also told her to get changed and she did.
After when Emma finished changing she went back to her mum and the rest of the family and didn’t go near the water again.
Victoria, you have some good ideas here. This has all the parts of a narrative structure but you might want to use some more interesting vocabulary next time.
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